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    As a teen, I came across an ad in the magazine for National Society of Poetry and decided to submit a poem I had written for a class to try my luck at a 35,000 dollar prize. I did not win but rather I got to be in the printed edition of all those who entered the contest.

    Published in an anthology called A DELICATE BALANCED, 1995


    Tunnel of Love
    Tunnel of love
    Tunnel of love
    Where art thy tunnel of love
    Is thy love hidden in the mouth of a dove
    Or is thy gone far and faraway to the bottom of the world, until hatred comes to its senses and depart
    Come back tunnel of love
    Come back
    If only I could feel you then I might wait for your return


    all go to the same place ;all come from dust and to the dust all return. who knows if the human spirit rises upward and if the spirit of the animal goes down into the earth?
    ecclesiastes 3:20-21 :-x

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    Beautiful poem Yaa. Short and sweet. Keep it up.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Neo View Post
    Beautiful poem Yaa. Short and sweet. Keep it up.
    Thanks, thanks a million


    all go to the same place ;all come from dust and to the dust all return. who knows if the human spirit rises upward and if the spirit of the animal goes down into the earth?
    ecclesiastes 3:20-21 :-x

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    Is thy love hidden in the mouth of a dove
    Or is thy gone far and faraway to the bottom of the world, until hatred comes to its senses and depart
    "hidden in the mouth of a dove,...bottom of the world" i like the symbolism here. Good job.

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    bravo yaa.. let us enjoy more of ur poetical styles please

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    (X)tra (L)ove
    I can't decide
    'Till I'm hidden
    I'll search for you
    Somewhere between your
    Arms
    and
    Death
    I'll find the meaning of life between
    You
    and
    I



    ------I need help editing this one....I want to make it a simple 3 or 4 stanza poem but, anyway, any input is welcomed--------------------------


    all go to the same place ;all come from dust and to the dust all return. who knows if the human spirit rises upward and if the spirit of the animal goes down into the earth?
    ecclesiastes 3:20-21 :-x

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    I can't see this being split into 3-4 stanzas. If the above is a unit within a larger poem then may be i can help.
    Beware lest you lose the substance by grasping at the shadow. ~Aesop

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    Neo will pro'bly have a hissy-fit when he sees that Ive rehashed such an old thread but I like seeing the readership surpassing 300views.... Here is an old poem of mine


    (untitled)
    Passing time in this endless life
    Never was I to dive
    Into a pool of rust

    may the renewal of life
    condure emotion anew
    might i examine the pain and find it few

    honest renditions of love
    may come and passerby
    but nevermore the friendship's host

    likened unto a bird
    spreading wings in haste
    likened unto trust, my memories fade

    make these truths a part of mine
    do you claim yours first
    as my challenge of life is asunder

    microphones spread the word
    may i never silence another
    these words i seek bring knowledge of an impassioned few




    -----------------------I wrote this a long time ago in my journal, now that I read it again I just had to share it....more to come


    all go to the same place ;all come from dust and to the dust all return. who knows if the human spirit rises upward and if the spirit of the animal goes down into the earth?
    ecclesiastes 3:20-21 :-x

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